Below is a sample of writing submitted to a recent international assessment for New South Whales University. The writing was recognized as being in the top 3-10 % of their peers around New Zealand.
Laura was beautiful/ She had always been told that. As her long golden hair caught the sunlight, her big blue eyes sparkled brighter than they ever had. As she continued thinking her thinking frown turned into a pearly white smile. “Yes!” she thought to herself, my next book is going to be a hit! Laura was an author and had published 12 books in the short time of 4 years. Laura was still quite young, she was at the age of 30 years old. She was also the mother of two young children, their names were Charlotte and Max. The children were twins. Both of them were 4 years and 2 months old & they loved each other dearly. Laura’s new book was about how to cope with the death of your loved ones. She, herself had already lost her mother & another one of her children. Laura’s father was in hospital, he was dealing with lung cancer. Laura loved writing because she lived out in the open country & this inspired her. She had always loved nature & this was how she intended to stay. Laura had always lived in the middle of Chaos-Town.
Millie Year 5
Lexi wasn’t one to get worried. Even with her four-year-old son painfully jumping around on her knees, she had no worries. She stayed calm. “Ethan, calm down. I’m sure The Wiggles won’t be starting for a little while.”
“Me don’t think so. Me thinks Dorothy the Dinosaur will be grumpy with me.”
Lexi laughed. It was a beautiful laugh, bright and twinkly like a hundred little bells. She smacked her lips, and her lipstick stuck to her clean white teeth. Lexi just pulled out a tissue and wiped the lipstick off. Lexi didn’t care about make-up. She just smeared a bit of lipstick on in the mornings and she liked a bit of nail polish. She tied her chestnut brown hair up into a loose ponytail and she was ready for a day.
Lexi stared out the window. Trees danced in the breeze and young deer pranced along with some fuzzy rabbits. “Ethan, look at the animals!” Lexi whispered, causing Ethan to press his face against the window. Lexi loved animals. Cats, dogs, rabbits, deer, monkeys, you name it, she loved it. Animals made her smile, and caused her face to brighten up like the stars. Her sky blue eyes would grin all on their own. That’s how much Lexi loved animals.
“Ethan, we’re home!”
“i’m comings for yous, Dorothy!”
Lexi laughed her beautiful laugh, as she stepped inside her brightly decorated home.
Laura Year 6